託福寫作：你的託福文章跑題了嗎
怎麼判定自己的文章有沒有跑題呢?爲了幫助大家，下面小編給大家帶來下文：託福寫作：你的託福文章跑題了嗎?來看看吧!
託福寫作：你的託福文章跑題了嗎?
對於託福寫作來說，一個普通學生想要衝刺高分，最爲重要的還是要遵循官方給出的評分標準，我們看評分標準對觀點的要求是什麼呢?ETS給出的關鍵詞是：在structure中，做到unity(統一性)，progression(漸進性)，coherence(連貫性)，這個基本上就概括了對題目解析的大體要求。這三個關鍵詞怎麼體現在一篇具體的託福文章中呢?我們來逐一解析。
一、 Unity統一性
什麼叫統一性呢?就是文章中的理由是不是能很好的支持文章中的立場，展開部分的幾個分論點是不是緊扣第一段的觀點，而且寫到最後重申立場時，有沒有發生偏差，有沒有做到首尾呼應。拿一道託福真題來做例子：
Money is the most important aspect in a job. 錢是工作中最重要的部分。
題目是最常見的問同意不同意，有的同學上來就說我同意，然後論證，第一段錢很重要，能讓我們獲得物質滿足，第二段錢很重要，能給我們帶來社會認同感，然後寫着寫着到第三段可能是寫到後來實在找不到點兒了，沒有話說了，也可能是時間不夠寫迷糊了，開始論證“可是錢買不到快樂，而快樂也是很重要的。”然後得出一個結論，錢買不來快樂，快樂也很重要。這樣我們可以明顯看出來，這位同學找出的第三個觀點和結尾段都背離了開頭段的觀點，違背了統一性的原則。而這個錯誤，幾乎是考場有限時間高度緊張時最容易犯的錯誤。
二、Progression漸進性
第二個，漸進性，也就是論點之間要有遞進關係，找出的論點要避免交叉重合，而且各個論點避免同一層面的反覆論證。還拿剛纔那道真題來說。有的同學會給出這樣一個思路：
開頭：同意，錢是最重要的。
第一段：錢可以滿足衣食住行的需求;
第二段：錢可以買衣服，鞋子，車或者奢侈品。
結尾：錢最重要，可以買一切想買的。
我們看這個同學雖然找出了三個點，可是問題出現在這三個點都是在物質需求的層面反覆論證。比如我們加一個，錢可以讓我們獲得社會認同感，實現自我價值，可以讓我們旅遊，看歌劇，出國學習充電，這都涉及到了精神滿足，就有了遞進性，會比較符合評分標準的要求，而且這樣多幾個層面，也比較容易展開，有話可說。
三、Coherence連貫性
第三點，連貫性，這個包括兩個方面，在寫的內容上要有一條清楚的邏輯線，最忌諱東拉西扯的湊字數，滿篇都找不到點，要做到這個呢，在形式上最好用一些很明顯的邏輯連接詞，將句與句，段與段銜接在一起，讓判卷老師也能迅速的找到點，比如最簡單的firstly, in addition, finally, according to, consequently，in contrast, 這樣不管是遞進，因果還是對比，都有個清晰的線順下來。
託福寫作中常犯的十個錯誤
1、不一致(Disagreements)
所謂不一致不光指主謂不一致，它還包括了數的不一致時態不一致及代詞不一致等。
例1. When one have money, he can do what he want to.(人一旦有了錢，他就能想幹什麼就幹什麼。)
剖析：one是單數第三人稱，因而本句的have應改爲has;同理want應改爲wants。本句是典型的主謂不一致。
改爲：Once one has money, he can do what he wants(to do).
2、修飾語錯位(Misplaced Modifiers)
英語與漢語不同，同一個修飾語置於句子不同的位置，句子的含義可能引起變化。對於這一點中國學生往往沒有引起足夠的重視，因而造成了不必要的誤解。
例1. I believe I can do it well and I will better know the world outside the campus.
剖析：better位置不當，應置於句末。
3、句子不完整(Sentence Fragments)
在口語中，交際雙方可藉助手勢語氣上下文等，不完整的句子完全可以被理解。可是書面語就不同了，句子結構不完整會令意思表達不清，這種情況常常發生在主句寫完以後，筆者又想加些補充說明時發生。
例1. There are many ways to know the society. For example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on.
剖析：本句後半部分“for example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on.”不是一個完整的句子，僅爲一些不連貫的詞語，不能獨立成句。
改爲：There are many ways to know society, for example, by TV, radio, and newspaper.
4、懸垂修飾語(Dangling Modifiers)
所謂懸垂修飾語是指句首的短語與後面句子的邏輯關係混亂不清。例如：At the age of ten，my grandfather died. 這句中“at the age of ten” 只點出十歲時，但沒有說明“誰”十歲時。按一般推理不可能是my grandfather，如果我們把這個懸垂修飾語改明確一點，全句就不那麼費解了。
改爲：When I was ten, my grandfather died.
例1. To do well in college, good grades are essential.
剖析：句中不定式短語“to do well in college”的邏輯主語不清楚。
改爲：To do well in college, a student needs good grades.
5、詞性誤用(Misuse of Parts of Speech)
“詞性誤用”常表現爲：介詞當動詞用;形容詞當副詞用;名詞當動詞用等。
例1. None can negative the importance of money.
剖析：negative系形容詞，誤作動詞。
改爲：None can deny the importance of money.
6、指代不清(Ambiguous Reference of Pronouns)
指代不清主要講的是代詞與被指代的人或物關係不清，或者先後所用的代詞不一致。試看下面這一句：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid.(瑪麗和我姐姐很要好，因爲她要她做她的伴娘。)
讀完上面這一句話，讀者無法明確地判斷兩位姑娘中誰將結婚，誰將當伴娘。如果我們把易於引起誤解的代詞的所指對象加以明確，意思就一目瞭然了。這個句子可改爲：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid.
例1. And we can also know the society by serving it yourself.
剖析：句中人稱代詞we和反身代詞yourself指代不一致。
改爲：We can also know society by serving it ourselves.
7、不間斷句子(Run-on Sentences)
什麼叫run-on sentence?請看下面的例句。
例1. There are many ways we get to know the outside world.
剖析：這個句子包含了兩層完整的意思：“There are many ways.”以及“We get to know the outside world.”。簡單地把它們連在一起就不妥當了。
改爲：There are many ways for us to learn about the outside world. 或 There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world.
8、措詞毛病(Troubles in Diction)
Diction是指在特定的句子中如何適當地選用詞語的問題，學生在寫作中沒有養成良好的推敲，斟酌的習慣。他們往往隨心所欲，拿來就用。所以作文中用詞不當的錯誤比比皆是。
例1. The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.(農業方面化學物質使用的不斷增加也造成了污染。)
剖析：顯然，考生把obstacles“障礙”“障礙物”誤作substance“物質”了。另外“the increasing use(不斷增加的使用)” 應改爲“abusive use(濫用)”。
改爲：The abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.
9、累贅(Redundancy)
言以簡潔爲貴。寫句子沒有一個多餘的詞;寫段落沒有一個無必要的句子。能用單詞的不用詞組;能用詞組的不用從句或句子。如：In spite of the fact that he is lazy，I like him.
本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同謂語從句，我們按照上述“能用詞組的不用從句”。
可以改爲：In spite of his laziness, I like him.
例1. For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.
剖析：整個句子可以大大簡化。
改爲：Diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.
10、不連貫(Incoherence)
不連貫是指一個句子前言不對後語，或是結構上不暢通。這也是考生常犯的毛病。
例1. The fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.
剖析：The fresh water與逗號後的it不連貫。It與things在數方面不一致。
改爲：Fresh water is the most important thing in the world.
託福寫作如何從細節中找到觀點
託福寫作經驗認爲對此辦法就是要善於聯想到一些具體的事實、具體的例證以及具體的現象。比如說，要談論電視節目這一話題，可以聯想到新聞聯播，並由此想到它讓人們開闊視野，瞭解世界，但有人覺得話題太熟悉了，反而一時說不出什麼來。
資深外教老師上課，深入講解託福口語話題;熟練使用地道口語用此及常用句型;掌握口語應對技巧。對託福口語考題進行梳理，對獨立口語及綜合口語部分進行有針對性的訓練和講解，幫助學生在考場避免常見錯誤。訓練聽寫能力，加強筆記記錄訓練。
其實，託福寫作題目一般是永恆的話題，在任何時候都可以討論;或爲當代話題，讓所有的人都會有話可說。題目是公平的，絕對不會讓某一專業的考生有特別的優勢。
所以，考生一定能聯想起具體細小的事情，再形成觀點。把看得見摸得着的事物帶來的思考變成作文裏的分支觀點，具體細節內容變成證據。這樣就不擔心託福作文字數不足了，這不失爲一種很好的策略。例如，“計算機的利與弊”這個話題似乎太大，但是可能想到的具體的現象是小孩、學生要在計算機前玩計算機遊戲。由此帶來的思考是，這些學生整天呆在那裏對他們的頭腦是有害的(harmful to their minds)，並且浪費大量時間(waste a lot of time)。
由此，當頭腦出現空白時，應該將具體的、細小的、瑣碎的、微不足道的事物所引發的思考變成觀點，再進行論述。這種定式思維的形成需要多下工夫。從無話可說到有話可說，下面的例子讓人不無啓發：在多種場合下，經常要歡迎領導講幾句話。領導往往首先開口說：同志們(大家)好，我利用這個機會講三句話。接着講第一句話時，腦子裏不知道第二句話是什麼，講第二句時，根本就沒想第三句要說什麼。但他最終說了三句話，以“謝謝大家”結束講話。“領導講話1、2、 3”成了一種定式，他總能找到有關內容講幾點，這種功夫是長期磨鍊的結果，寫作文也一樣，平時需要多多練習這種思維。
託福獨立寫作範文：農業食物給持續增長的人口VS破壞環境
託福寫作題目：Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment.(養活人口重要還是保護環境重要?)
託福寫作參考範文：
Modern agriculture methods like the use of pesticides and artificial fertilizers are widely used around the world. Along with such brings forth negative effects. The most obvious and detrimental impact of modern agriculture methods is environmental degradation. Many people believe that the environmental risks should not be taken into consideration since many people are suffering from the lack of food. I certainly disagree with this.
To begin with, despite the fact that there are people who suffer from starvation, the reason is not because of the lack of food. As a matter of fact, tons of grains and corns are wasted every year. If the government and the general public really care about starving people, they should have enough ability and adequate materials to offer help. People suffer just because of bad management, worldwide corruption, and terrible indifference. So there is no need to destroy wilderness areas or use environmentally-damaging agricultural methods to increase productivity. The world nowadays has more food than we need. As long as corruption and bad management are eradicated, the world would see less people starving.
Besides, the statement asserts that providing food for a growing number of people is more urgent than the protection of environment. I find this statement totally unconvincing. People’s survival depends on the environment. More often than not, whenever the environment gets damaged, the deleterious effects are always irreversible. In other words, once the environment on which we depend on is disrupted, our lives are placed at risk. Modern agriculture, although it provides enough food, has contaminated the water and soil. When people eat crops grown with polluted water and soil, diseases will break out sooner or later. Genetically modified crops, although their negative effects are not obvious and not yet confirmed, should also be treated with great care, for it is reported that dogs, cats, and other pets become sick after ingesting GM food. If human beings are negatively affected by modern agriculture, untold dire consequences will arise. People will suffer from diseases and the government will shoulder considerable medical bills. Worse, the society may become unstable and inharmonious.
From the above discussion, I can draw the conclusion that there are other more effective methods to address starvation. No matter how much food we produce, as long as corruption and wasteful use exist, there will always be starving people. Besides, a healthy natural environment is a basic requirement of our survival. We cannot increase food production at the expense of our environment, lest we are bound to suffer for our inconsideration and recklessness.
