託福寫作修辭目的題——舉例論證
很多同學認爲修辭目的題是一種很高深的題目，因爲它的名字本身就給人一種高深的感覺。其實修辭目的題是一種再簡單不過的題目，無非就是問我們作者爲什麼寫了某些內容。聯繫一下我們的寫作，其實你會發現，修辭目的題也就如此。當我們在寫作的事實，寫作老師教給我們的中間段的常用寫法會有哪些呢?比如說舉例論證，比如說因果論證，比如說對比論證，或者是類比論證。寫作老師教給我們的這些寫作手法其實就是修辭目的題中常見的修辭手段，這兩者在本質上是一樣的。今天，我們就其中一種——舉例論證來進行詳細說明。
託福寫作修辭目的題——舉例論證
我們舉例子是爲了什麼?當然是爲了論證論點。當我們在寫中間段的時候，不就是先給論點，然後通過例子來進行說明嗎?那麼當修辭目的題題目中問到的內容是例子的時候，即作者舉了這個例子是爲了什麼，我們的目標非常明確，就是在文章中找到這個例子說明的那個論點。根據西方典型的論證方式，先給論點，後進行論證，我們要找的答案就在這個例子的前一句或是前幾句。切記，作者一定會給出論點，千萬不要通過例子幫作者去想這個例子爲了說明什麼。那麼首先我如何確定題目中的內容就是例子呢?常見的舉例形式會有哪些呢?在這裏，我把例子分成兩種：明例和暗例。何爲明例?即出現了直接舉例詞，如for example，for instance等。出現在這類詞之後的內容毫無疑問一定就是例子。那麼這些例子論證的論點是什麼呢?根據這些詞的使用習慣，一般是直接出現在論點之後，那麼我們就只要找到前一句話就可以了。這是明例的情況，但在真題中出現的頻率較低，出現頻率更高的是暗例。何爲暗例?暗例就是出現了暗舉例詞或者完全沒有舉例詞。首先我們來看一下何爲暗舉例詞。我把暗舉例詞定義爲在特定語境下可以充當舉例詞的詞。比如在TPO4的第一篇DEER POPULATIONS OF THE PUGET SOUND中，原文有這麼兩句話：No doubt the numbers of deer declined still further. Recall the fate of the Columbian white-tailed deer, now in a protected status. 在第二句中有個單詞叫recall，它並不是完全意義上的舉例詞，但在這個語境中recall就充當了一個舉例詞，那麼後面的內容就是一個例子，那麼這個例子論證的論點就是它前面這句話。這類詞會有很多，比如remember，include等。暗例中還有一種情況，就是完全沒有出現舉例詞。那麼我如何確定舉例關係呢?其實論點和例子之間會存在某種形式的對應，在做題時常用到的就是通過某個或某幾個詞上面的對應來體現出這種關係。如在OG PRACTICE TEST 1第二篇THE EXPRESSION OF EMOTIONS中有這麼三句話It turns out that the expression of many emotions may be universal. Smiling is apparently a universal sign of friendliness and approval. Baring the teeth in a hostile way, as noted by Charles Darwin in the nineteenth century, may be a universal sign of anger. 在這三句話中，第一句是論點，二三句都是例子。那麼這兩個例子通過什麼方式與論點聯繫起來呢，首先，當然是通過順序體現出來，但更重要的是論點與例子之間出現了詞上的對應，這三句話中都出現了這個核心詞universal。以這個詞爲主線，例子在悄無聲息中就與論點起到到對應。
綜上所述，例子可以有舉例詞，也可以沒有舉例詞。掌握住了常見的舉例形式能夠幫助我們正確地完成修辭目的題中的舉例論證這種修辭目的。
託福寫作語法的基本要求
語法規範
1. 不完整的句子
(1) If you find that writing is hard is because it is hard. One of the hardest things that people do.
If you find that writing is hard is because it is hard—one of the hardest things that people do.
(2) Stereotypes are a kind of gossip about the world. A gossip that makes us prejudge people before we ever lay eyes on them.
Stereotypes are a kind of gossip about the world, a gossip that makes us prejudge people before we ever lay eyes on them.
Stereotypes are a kind of gossip about the world that makes us prejudge people before we ever lay eyes on them.
2. 分詞短語作狀語的錯誤
Holding her in his arms, the moon hid behind the cloud.
As soon as the moon hid behind the cloud, he held her in his arms.
3. 修飾詞錯位
(1) Romeo received word that Juliet was dead from another messenger.
Romeo received word from another messenger that Juliet was dead.
(2) After leaving the stage, the audience’s applause called the musicians back for an encore.
After the musicians left the stage, the audience’s applause called them back for an encore.
(3) Disruptive in the classroom, a teacher may become exasperated with hyperactive children.
Disruptive in the classroom, hyperactive children may exasperate a teacher.
4. 串句
Unproductive or uncooperative workers can seriously harm an organization, for this reason, employers need to have accurate information about employee performance, but when employees have full access to their own personnel files, co-workers and even supervisors will often find it difficult to give frank criticism of underachievers or to report troublemakers.
Unproductive or uncooperative workers can seriously harm an organization; for this reason, employers need to have accurate information about employee performance. But when employees have full access to their own personnel files, co-workers and even supervisors will often find it difficult to give frank criticism of underachievers or to report troublemakers.
5. 時態錯誤
The researchers admitted that they falsified crucial data in the study.
The researchers admitted that they had falsified crucial data in the study.
6. 代詞錯誤
(1) Too often people either keep their feelings to themselves or take it our on others.
Too often people either keep their feelings to themselves or take them our on others.
(2) Each girl and boy must do their part to keep the home fires burning.
Each girl and boy must do her or his part to keep the home fires burning.
(3) This college has their own entrance requirements.
This college has its own entrance requirements.
(4) If one wishes to participate in the political process, you can begin by voting regularly.
If one wishes to participate in the political process, one can begin by voting regularly.
(5) The fire in the library was finally put out. For a while, they thought an unhappy employee might have started it.
The fire in the library was finally put out. For a while, the library staff thought an unhappy employee might have started it.
7. 結構混亂
Because Hemingway’s style is simple makes his writing accessible to all readers.
Because Hemingway’s style is simple, his writing is accessible to all readers.
Hemingway’s simple style makes his writing accessible to all readers.
託福獨立寫作獨家攻略
一、獨立寫作命題形式
託福獨立寫作的命題形式一般爲“Do you agree or disagree with the following statement…”(你是否同意下面的論斷……)，要求考生就題目中的論斷給出自己的觀點，並用例證來支撐自己的觀點。字數要求300字以上，考試時間爲30分鐘。題目中的論斷涉及各種話題，比如成功類話題、工作類話題、金錢類話題、科技類話題等等。
二、獨立寫作命題規律
既然託福寫作題目允許考生選擇自己的觀點，說明題目通常沒有定論。有些獨立寫作的題目具有明顯的特徵，下面小編爲大家總結了三類，併爲每一類題目提供一些寫作技巧。
第一類，有些寫作題目中含有“should”或者“should not”的字眼，對於這類題目中的觀點，考生既可以同意，也可以反對。例如以下這道題目“Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should not take part-time jobs while they are studying in university.”，考生就可以在開頭這樣寫：“Whether or not students should take part-time jobs while they are studying in university has been a controversial issue.”，然後提供合適的理由進行論證。
第二類，有些寫作題目中含有“best”、“most”、“all”等表示絕對語氣的字眼，對於這類題目，小編建議考生選擇反對的觀點。因爲這類題目大都誇大了某些因素的重要性，否認了其他因素的影響。例如以下這道題目“Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way for parents to teach children responsibility is to have them care for animals.”考生就可以在開頭這樣寫：“This argument exaggerates the importance of A and denies the significance of other factors such as B, C, and D which can also contribute to sth./sb.”
第三類，這類題目通常是將A和B兩種事物進行比較，題目中含有“more…than…”或者“better”的字眼，對於這類題目，考生可以採取讓步式的寫法。例如以下這道題目“Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It’s better to spend money on pleasant things such as vacations than to save money for the future.”考生可以在開頭這樣寫：“Although A/B has some benefits for…, I still believe that B/A will exert more significant influence on…”
三、獨立寫作常見問題及對策
在新託福寫作考試中，很多考生看到題目頭腦會一片空白，不知道從何入手。要想解決這個問題，考生可以將歷年託福獨立寫作備考資料進行歸類，總結出每類話題的寫作思路以及通用論據。例如以下幾個題目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? 1)People are now easier to become educated than in the past. 2)Nowadays it’s easier to maintain health than the past. 3)It is easier for parents to raise their children than 50 years ago. 如果考生同意上述觀點，我們就可以把 “各方面意識的提高”作爲一個通用論據，也可以把“經濟發展以及收入的提高”作爲通用論據。總之，雖然寫作話題多種多樣，但是總結起來不外乎那麼幾類。只要考生善於歸納、勤于思考，就能解決寫作“無話可說”的問題。
託福優秀範文：童年期重要嗎
題目：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
A person’s childhood years (the time from birth to twelve years of age) are the most important years of a person’s life.
範文：
Childhood build the very foundation of an individual development. Although many theorists emphasize the importance of environs, family background, and community atmosphere to which an individual is exposure during the adolescence period, childhood times have been figuratively described by such neurologist as Freud as the seeds in which all genes are ingrained or embedded. Environs are the soil in which the seed grows. Mark Twain, the greatest American novelist, is said to write in Vienna of images that he began storing at age four. The childhood sunny delights naturally shaped Mark Twain’s metaphor. The Mississippi river, the boat, the prairie, the woods in autumn dress, the motionless hanging hawk in the sky, the oaks, and the rustles of the fallen leaves in his childhood all created the novels and thus the novelist, whom the course of human events has never ever had before and the one who will be able to match him in the talent of writing has not yet loomed. Perhaps the unique childhood cannot be duplicated.
Childhood time lists itself at the top of importance to personal development because it is in the childhood that human beings form the rudimentary language skills that develop in the course of growing into one of the most important abilities to live and learn. Child behavior researchers claim that at the age of about two years old human beings begin to speak, and this is the very start point of childhood. In the following five years child language ability grows at a tremendous speed. At seven years old, children have already had the basic language skills in presentation, discourse, and self-expression. In a certain sense, at the childhood time, human beings foster or forge the verbal communication competence. In fact, many linguists also claim that childhood is the best time to learn a foreign language.
Childhood is the most important period also because during this period children shape the competence to observe and perceive natural and society. The ability to perceive is the first step for human beings to learn or cognize. Language follows. Childhood time also implants the personality, characteristics, and interest, although all of these possibly yield to the changes and challenges in the post-childhood environment.
In fact, the importance of childhood time to the development of an individual human being has not yet fully unfolded. If we study this topic with insights and details, the restriction of 250 words in an essay seems to be too narrow.
